Paint me a picture, show me all,
Use vivid colors but black for the pall.
The shades of red be extensively used,
Tone down the blues of its different hues.
Paint me a picture, show me all,
How our empire rose, despite the first fall.
Man, woman, and child, depict them true
The worst affected as the violence grew.
Paint me a picture, show me all,
Towards our enemies, we did crawl.
Bloodshed, hunger, fear and hate,
Are all that remains in this soldier's fate.
Paint me a picture, show me all,
Place it on my now bare walls.
Today, I may no longer be able to see,
But in it my son will be able to see my past, my glory.
7 comments:
i love the imagery
the brutality of war is a sad thing...
-teddy
its nice :)
I still don't get how you can rhyme.
makes me think of a kingdom. :O
Bare walls.
I love that line.
I think that just summarizes what could possibly happen to one after the war zone.
Nice. :)
this ending was the best :P
you should try some of your poetry at the Conjunction forums -- http://conjunction.webs.com/apps/forums/
they offer great critique there, nice community.
also, feel free to visit The God Bolt, http://thegodbolt.blogspot.com
and i look forward to reading more of your work
Very nice. I liked the first line being repeated to different tones. Good stuff!
"Paint me a picture, show me all" - I love the sound.
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