There was once a night when the skies were red
Red with the forest fires on the hills
The Moon was spared, maintaining her milky white
As the blackness in the sky grew deeper still.
7 comments:
Nehal
said...
I like this :) Thank you!! you could have included the setting and thunder. the moon wasn't milky you know [sorry about this!]; it was the himalayan golden shade.
it starts of more like a story... dont really get how the 3rd line fits...cant catch the continuity.. but i love the last line...its actually an unimaginable image...
starts off more like a story... and the images are really prominent..i love the last line its an unimaginable image...but isnt it contradicting ur first line ?? unless it was meant to...
7 comments:
I like this :) Thank you!! you could have included the setting and thunder. the moon wasn't milky you know [sorry about this!]; it was the himalayan golden shade.
this one was my favourite of the lot...
i would like to see that moon.
really nice!
loll
do u remember me kunaal, u and rav and some others used to listen to telugu songs in the foota field after dinner - that ws jst heaven man.
it starts of more like a story...
dont really get how the 3rd line fits...cant catch the continuity..
but i love the last line...its actually an unimaginable image...
starts off more like a story...
and the images are really prominent..i love the last line its an unimaginable image...but isnt it contradicting ur first line ?? unless it was meant to...
its brilliant!!!
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